Ok...I just read the rest of the story and I like it a lot!

But what the hell is up with the ending?!?!
It's very possible, but very unrealistic. Afterall, female heart attacks are at a higher percentage than male heart attacks, but i still think your ending is a bit unrealistic.

NNJ, I agree with your comment about the characters not fully developed or whatever you said....But remember that it's only a short story, therefore it's not neccessary to explain that stuff in the story.

It that a critisismal review?

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