Non Time Mortem

To be accompanied with panpipes:

Non Time Mortem
Time Solum Inopiam Vitae

Go to sleep
and rest your eyes
tomorrow is
a new sunrise

your pain is gone
like winter snows
we’ll say ‘so long’
that’s how it goes

the rain will fall
the floods will come
the clouds’ dark shawl
will veil the sun

standing here
this lack of light
it seems that we’re
in endless night

The taste of steel
I stop and stare
this empty feel
this black nightmare

And the sun sets
the locusts sigh
and colder it gets
the blackbird cries

pyramids will crumble
and glaciers will recede
windstorms roll and rumble
blowing dry and dusty leaves

Go to sleep
and rest your eyes
tomorrow is
a new sunrise


Yeah... a bit melodramatic, I suppose, but I like it. Criticism please?

No criticism here!

Very nice work. I enjoyed how the rhythm of the poem was sustained so well.

I particularly liked this verse myself:

the rain will fall
the floods will come
the clouds’ dark shawl
will veil the sun

Keep writing!

Tres' Cool.....I like it..

'The locusts sigh'

I think that's my faourite verse, right there.