Song I Wrote

Evenin' ladies and gents. So, here's this song I wrote. I call it "Dead Sleep", or maybe "At my Worst". But here it is.

Dead Sleep

It's been too long
Since I've had the hope I should
I'd try to be happy in dreams
If only I could

My mouth and tongue are liars
Don't need this broken pacifier
You will sow what you reap
Until I wake from this dead sleep

I haven't had a chance
At doing what I can't
My head has been molded again
My soul has been sold again

My mouth and tongue are liars
Don't need this broken pacifier
You will sow what you reap
Until I wake from this dead sleep

What is wrong with me?
I haven't slept for days
My subconscience has been raped
I'm in a cage, I'm in a cage

My mouth and tongue are liars
Don't need this broken pacifier
You will sow what you reap
Until I wake from this dead sleep



When you hear this song on the radio in a few years, you will be freaked out and you will say "holy crap! He showed us that when it was a work in progress!". So there you go, tell me what you think.

i will print this page and will sell it a few 1000$ in a few years. fans of your futur super group will be willing to pay a lot for this!

nice lyrics btw keep on writing

Thanks man!

Simple, but nice. Reminds me of RHCP.

It's really good. I like it.

Ditto.

you never told me you had been writing songs lately

James is back!

Nice poem, its really good. I like the way you repeat that stanza at the end again. The only thing I would comment on is that the stanzas dont seem to link. Aprt from that, it's awesome, keep on writing!

Rabid, I'm glad you made a thread for us to post the songs we've written. After reading my poetry, I assume you were hoping I'd share a song or 2...

I call this little ditty Love Before Death

Every day, the same thing
We take each other for granted
Strangers all around us
Do we love or just content

I choose Love, I choose Love
Why hate when we can love?
Tomorrow we could be gone
Why hate who could be gone

Sidewalks, streets, busy lives
Leaving, coming, back and forth
Smiles are good, hugs are better
Or perhaps a love letter?

I choose Love, I choose Love
Why hate when we can love?
Tomorrow we could be gone
Why hate who could be gone

In the end does it matter?
Ask yourself a thing or two
What does a person do
When whom you loves is dead and gone

I choose Love, i choose Love
Why hate when we can Love
Tomorrow we could be gone
Why hate who could be gone

Thanks again for the support

thats a great song, sounds to me like metallica or something.

actually this thread is for my song.

very true. its kind of the purpose of the thread really.

I think G/L's song sounds country. Like the Dixie Chicks or something. (that's not supposed to be an insult, btw...)

Then it's a pretty useless thread.