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| melancholy dreams i started to fade until i saw it that day, i saw the sky, so blue and clean, i saw the sea, so warm and clean, i walked on water and touched the sky, i walked on air and said goodbye, i watched you all fade inside the clouds, i watched you all fade and i cried aloud, dont leave me now, i need you today, but today is the day i had to fade away, i reached for the ground it was too far away, i reached for the sea as i slipped away, is this a dream, should i wake myself up? or is this a drink, should i take another sip from the cup? this warmth inside, where does it come from? the cold i hide, from inside it does come. the warmth inside takes me away, not giving up, just fading in a way, like drifting along a cool summer stream, like im trapped inside a warm night's dream, trapped in her arms ill never run away, trapped is no word to describe how i feel today, whole or complete is how she makes me feel, but alone and cold is how i really feel, she is but a dream i had a long time ago, a dream i had that kept me alive but now i must let go, drift away on a stream, cold as winter's snow, fade away into a dream, sad as the last summer's glow. |
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| Not bad. Predictable rhyming scheme. but not bad. |
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| Sounds a little nursery-rhymish. ~Fletch |
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| i wouldnt read this to a four year old |
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| that is awesome. i am gonna start working on a poem just cuz i read this. AWESOME! Five stars ***** |
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