A black star

A black star
No one notices
No one cares
It's pain no one knows
If only they would have chose
Chosen it when it was bright
Chosen it when it was alright
Now its borken
And now they wonder
Wonder why the black star
Has the scar
And why the black star
Is in mar


So, what do you guys think? Someone please reply!!!!

i hope i can help really but i dont have any clue

What do you mean you don't have a clue? What about my poem confussed you? Do you not understand what it's talking about? I used a metaphore which was 'the black star', which is me! I'm not black, i mean black as in dark, and sad! do you kinda get it now, or did i confuss you agiain?!?!

Could you make a collection of your poems in a unique thread, please?

What an original title.....

"Blame it on the black star
Blame it on the falling sky
Blame it on the sun"
- Radiohead

And there's always Yngwie Malmsteens neo-classical shred instrumental bearing the same title.

what are you trying to say?!? That I copied someone?!?! I can truthfully say that I've never seen another poem or whatever with the same title! I don't even really read books, watch t.v. or surf the net that much! If you are implying that I stold it from someone else, your so WRONG! and it offends me alot!

I don't think that he's trying to say you copied it, just that you got the name from another song. And don't get so upset, it's just a internet chatboard.

well, i didn't ok

"Now its borken" ...a Swedish Chef reference?

lol opps! that was an accident! i meant 'broken'! sorry about that! XOXO

I wrote that poem 6 months ago...under s a different title named Subterranean Homesick Alien

This plagerism stuff is getting ridiculous.

I hope you make millionns with it

I say your poetry shows promise, but excelling in something requires study, and if you don't read like you said, you might be totally squandering your gift and passion. Read others works, published ones, and try and find ur niche.

I have that poster CerpinTaxt, the one for your avatar or wahtever its called

It's a kickass poster. I don't have that one, but I have the orange woodstock one.

if that poem is about you, then it seems your life is almost as bad as mine, not quite though