New song

Alright , this is a new song that one of the writers for my band just wrote in 4 days. I want to know if you think it has any potential or not.......doesnt have a name yet


A storm brews in the distant air
the horse man has broken the chains of hell
blood must be spilt
tears must be shed
for he has come for vengeance

leave your homes gather your loved
seek the holy spirit
for the only hope your heart posses is him

galloping on the sunset you’ll see his satanic face
pure skeleton mounting atop a steed only hell could spawn
the hooves that would break your spine
the fist of hell is here for your life

“sanctuary” is hollered over the screams
hands held up clenched up to his crucifix
holey water in the other
holy man will you be a savior

the sunset leaves the sky
the eye of the horse man glows in fire
holy man hollers the words of God
with a dark kick from the steed
holy man is no more

now with the eye of hell fixated on me
I wonder if I will live
acid breath melting my skin
torment and suffrage will begin

the blade is rose above my head
set my due date for It has come
time for me to meat my maker
mark my words
I will have my vengeance

It's shite! I can't hear it.

i meant the lyrics obviously

Can't read them.

oh, did it not work?

It's good. Reminds me of the book of Revelation.

erm.. i dunno.. not my cup of tea.. I'm more drawn too slightly more human lyrics.. i don't know if you know what i mean by that.. but I'm sure it's someone else's cup of tea"

cheers

Firstly.. tell the dude to get spellcheck..

Horseman is one word.....

Does anybody use the word "hollered" any more????

Why spell it holey on one line and holy on the next???

Women already have the right to vote here.. Suffrage is no longer a needed movement...

"Is rose".. that can't be right.....

And just what type of meat are we talking about here.. Porterhouse, sirloin, T-bone, vennison, pork, beef?????


Other than that.. it really didn't do much for me..

Get a spellcheck, Fulgy.

I can spell just fine... I just can't type...

i don't know why spelling matters in a song

because it can make all the difference between fans singing it properly.. or not.

cheers